As an article it's not particularly clear in method or presentation. It's not especially clear in what it's measuring, process, isolation of variables. But it's not attempting to be a journal article. So that's not what I meant about "needs work" (though it is hard to pull the message out of the wording).

But I don't think it supports your thesis. Again, thats part of what the web is about (not every posting should be a well polished pearl) so I"m glad you posted this. If you cared though, I'd improve your process. This post might not be worth rewriting though -- that's up to you.