Oh, wait. Did I say "helpful criticism?" The first comment strikes out the word "subsequently," calling it "entirely unnecessary and redundant" before exhorting "Don't use unnecessary words." Well, speaking of unnecessary words, how about "entirely" and "redundant" in your own comment? The rest are in a similar vein, coupling actual criticism with needless (and antagonistic) commentary. Instead of calling out a sentence as merely "too long," he has to then label it "an absolute monstrosity."
Nice dodge, millennial job seeker. This is not someone you want to work for.