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"He asked a Google engineer at a cocktail party whether he should be worried about his privacy."

Something similar is what led me to write my essay on ad tracking and Google that tried to trace it back to Larry and Sergey:

http://yuhongbao.blogspot.ca/2018/04/google-doubleclick-mozi...

Also see:

https://twitter.com/berendjanwever/status/775366191078641664

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Your essay is a bit of a wall of text, I would suggest adding headers and cutting up the paragraphs into smaller chunks to make it easier to read.

Also I feel like the general essay format that is taught to you in grade school is actually a bad format. Grade school project style reports are usually easier to read and easier to write.

Essays contorts most people's writing into a very awkward form. If people were allowed write without the restrictions of essays, they would usually be more clear.

Better yet, try the typical medium or journalistic article format to get better reading comprehension.

And maybe have it proofread by someone? I always do this and still end up with typos and grammar errors but a proofreading session will usually get rid of 90% or more of those.

Yea, the essay has other problems I want to fix too. What I am interested in most is the points about Larry/Sergey BTW.

You are using an older blogspot theme that is not mobile optimized. You can update it to one of the newer, streamlined and mobile optimized themes with one click. Since you currently have no background graphics, you might like Emporio.

This would likely help make it a bit more readable for very little effort, though a grammar and spell checker and shrinking some paragraphs would help as well.

I actually just now took the time to read this. A good (20-30 min) read. +1

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