>Us denizens of the Internet have become familiar with concepts that were foreign more than a decade ago, one of the most that causes the most influence is going viral.
This is largely unintelligible and, as a writer, I think something you should consider making more concrete. Otherwise, you run the risk of leaving your readership confused and, ultimately, not reading your work.
People need to be able to receive constructive feedback and improve, without feeling attacked.
I did not detect snark, or superiority in this feedback comment. Instead, it seems to genuinely attempt to offer constructive feedback.
The parent pointed out a specific fragment that needs re-work, which is an actionable item for the OP. Perhaps it could have been framed more positively, but constructing a place where people cannot offer direct, actionable feedback is quite unhelpful for all involved.
Otherwise, I agree that it appears helpful and applicable.