So, we were wondering if you could give us advice on our writing. Is it understandable? Is it well written? Does it convey our message? Thank you so much. http://signup.musicmind.co/
1) Ugh, Launchrock. I'm very tired of LR pages, they give no info and serve no purpose. You'd be better off with your own landing page and fake screenshots. With so many Launchrock pages that end up being fake, I think there's a weariness about it now.
2) You use a lot of words but I'm still not sure what you do. Are you a web app? Are you a social network? Can I listen to music, or just talk about music? Why do I need another music app when I have Spotify and iTunes? Answering these questions will make it more likely that I WANT early access to your site.
3) If you stay with the LR page, at least mock up some fake screenshots for the background. Try to be as real as possible, even if you have nothing.
We decided to use Launchrock because we were tired of spending so much of our development time on building a launch page (maybe because we're not designers). We used Launchrcok because we were pre-launch and believed that we could communicate effectively in one paragraph what we are trying to do. But if the sentiment is so anti-LR, or it causes us to look fake, I guess we will change.
On the second point. We're a social network for people to listen to their music, share their music, and connect with their favorite artists. This is beneficial to you because you are supporting artists with your song purchases vs streaming, you can consolidate all of your music listening and sharing in one place, and we allow you to connect with artists.
And on the third point. This is a really interesting point, which we haven't considered before. We'll try to do this.
We really appreciate it.
I'd also cut this sentence. It's redundant and adds no value: "Each listening to the same band, you were drawn together over music?"