Really liked the end of the poem. Honestly could have done without my own name in there, since it was a little jarring, and dispelled the dreamlike quality of the poem.
The original (in Minecraft) used the player handle so the site sortof has to ask you your name to reproduce that
YMMV -- I was a little creeped out by a blog that required my name, so I put a fake name. It was an extra level of indirection I could have done without.