Please don't be an internet jerk on this site. We're trying for something different here.
I do question the need for the verbosity of their own.
As a constructive advice, I do believe that a visual representation of the subject serves better not only to this context but also to the target audience.
As a side-note, I have a member of such audience still enjoying the summer break ... the wall of the OP text proved impenetrable, despite the initial interest.