Honestly, I read through this a few times and I have no idea what in the hell it does. Maybe I just missed the ball, but I have no idea what your product would do. Buzzwords galore.
Have you read E.O. Wilson? It is something like how ants come together, except humans. Hence, more complicated.
I would find your presentation appealing, then. I like to think about structures of organizations or systems visually.
One sentence, WTF do you intend to do?