I'm sorry, but you just can't "edit" quotes - that's just bad journalism. They wanted a sensational story that will rake in pageviews, and have conveniently slanted the quotes towards that. Pathetic to say the least.
Removing "these" from the a middle of a sentence is not nearly so easy. "These" generally refers to something and it can't be removed so easily just because an editor thinks that it can be. In this case, removing "these" changed the sentence to be a general statement about women from a statement amount a subset of women. This obviously should not be removed, regardless of the lack of a specific reference from "these". Leave the judgment to the reader.