Agree. Proper grammar and editing of your own content also might help.
Do you want me to copy-edit the text? I can do this later Wednesday evening (UK time zone)?
If you have a GitHub account you can directly edit the content through the following URL, and propose your changes.
> https://github.com/oncletom/oncletom.io/blob/master/source/_...
No major issues with your communication, just obviously not English as first language.
OP: is this too far from your inner voice, what you intended? Is the edit worth finishing?
I'm having to link to the text file as HN says the 1200 word extract is too long.
Markdown
https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/8403291/Dijiwan-rewrite
Formatted to 55 col
https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/8403291/Dijiwan-rewrite2
PS: I need to sort my editing tools out! I just used two plain text editor windows side by side and it was clunky.