I'm probably a prude but the profanity and use of "wtf", "badass" and "retardedness" are off-putting, especially if you expect to target businesses.
Seems super unprofessional and potentially offensive. I'd say it's damn near saying something like: "tired of all those gay products out there that...?"
luckily for us, those are the kinds of clients we don't want to deal with right now :)