Was the use of "ask" as a noun the problem?
I know there's a limit on title length. If I may suggest a good eyeball catching title for this would be:
"It took Bezos 60 tries for him to get $1M for Amazon from 22 investors"
http://itre.cis.upenn.edu/~myl/languagelog/archives/001331.h...
http://english.stackexchange.com/questions/4246/can-or-shoul...
Nouning verbs (like verbing nouns) is very common in English, to the extent it's often unclear which came first.
"Ask" as a noun, however, I hear all the time...and not from bankers or New Yorkers. It's very common in Bay Area tech.