Yes, the revision between a quick-take and fleshed out article changes the emphasis of the narrative in the story. No, this is not okay if done without a note that it has been done IF you want to be called a document of record. This statement is irrespective of this particular piece.

>The Pao NYT piece never changes the directionality of the concerns it raises.

With respect to this particular piece, I was pointing out later revisions that do change the directionality of a particular concept, namely its description of silicon valley.

"Ellen Pao Is Stepping Down as Reddit’s Chief" becomes "Silicon Valley 2, Ellen Pao 0".

"the entrenched sexist culture of Silicon Valley" becomes

"the entrenched male-dominated culture of Silicon Valley" becomes

"the entrenched sexist culture of Silicon Valley" becomes

"the entrenched male-dominated culture of Silicon Valley".

That is not just a fleshing out of a narrative, but an editorial flip-flop. Sexist is a particular and egregious charge to lay on an entire culture - an editorial statement. Male-dominated is a fact, separable from the concept of sexist. One can be proven, one cannot. Subjective vs objective. Opinion vs journalism.